She Traded her Meal for a Window (for Trifecta)

Says Trifecta – “For this weekend’s challenge, we’d like you to read the 33 words below and then add 33 of your own words to move the story along.”

Says Me – So that you can read it fluidly, I’m not separating the 66 words. Just know that the first 33 (in italics) are theirs and the last 33 are mine.

The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction. She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.

And, as she watched her final sunset, she heard the guard slide the door open. “They’re ready for you,” he said. And she stood, to begin her walk down the hall of retribution.

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17 responses to “She Traded her Meal for a Window (for Trifecta)

  1. oooooh – dark! I like!!!

  2. I think you have the lead this weekend in the darkness department. But she’s not walking down the hall of retribution for nothing, right? Great and unique take on the prompt!

  3. Nice. I like the sound of the door sliding open. I always find the dark side appealing. I’m like that. Great job.

  4. The prison Chaplin read the prayers that were familiar to her from her childhood. Memories flooded her mind and heart. For the first time, she was glad her parents and brother were dead.

  5. I really like where you went with this.. great job

  6. The door sliding open spoke its own 100 words. I love the darkness and then the walk. This was well crafted awesomeness.

  7. I like the unique direction you took this. Hadn’t even considered a prison cell, but it really works 🙂

  8. She certainly did something really bad. For some reason, I’m getting the impression she’s totally ready to face her consequences. Dark is right! Love it.

  9. Reminds me of this movie:

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Closet_Land

    http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0101597/

    And here you can watch the entire movie on YouTube, in nine parts. Here is the first part in case you are interested. I don’t want to say which part of the movie your piece reminded me of, because I don’t want to reveal anything about the movie in case you should ever want to see it.

  10. This is such a great, dark piece of writing 😀 Well done! 😀

  11. in the end they are square with the house. well done ms odnt, for the quick dip in the dark end of the pool.

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