Getting LOST in my writing

It’s Trifextra Weekend Challenge time. And this one proved to be hard! All entries must total exactly 33 words and they must include the word ‘Lost’ in the title but not in the story itself.

As soon as I read that word, my mom-liness kicked in … and here’s what I did with it.

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Trifextra Entry – Lost

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When she turned, he was gone. “Duncan?” she shouted, scanning the room. Her pulse hastened. Her chest tightened. Now trembling, she called again and heard him, giggling from his hiding spot. “Hi, Mama!”

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Hang on to your babies. It only takes a second. God, what a terrible feeling …

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12 responses to “Getting LOST in my writing

  1. the worst feeling,.

    You captured it with intensity and urgency. Excellent.

  2. You NEVER forget this feeling. I’ve been there. I don’t know who was more scared, me or T when I found him. He saw the absolute fear on my face and broke down into tears. “Trembling”…perfect word!

  3. You’ve been turning out some great stuff for these.
    Can’t wait to see what you do next week!

  4. even worse for a Nana who somehow loses sight of one of her grandbabies. Hard to do now, though as the oldest towers above me and 3 of the other 7 also see me from above. I’m holding onto the 3 others, hoping against hope they stay little awhile longer. 🙂

    good take on this

  5. Thats why my kid is on a leash….(just kidding – LOL)

  6. Ugh! I hate that. Good job capturing that feeling.

  7. That is a scary moment.

  8. My son is a flight risk.
    I’ve known this feeling too much here recently.
    Dear God he can vanish poof like that and be gone like I’d never had him.
    http://jesterqueen.com

  9. I’ve had that moment of panic with one of my kids too. She loved to hide under clothing racks when we’d do shopping.

  10. Yeah, it’s horrible. Happened to me with my kid who was 6 at the time, in the worlds largest McDonalds at the time. He turned out to have found a table right over the highway. I had him carry the food from then on.

  11. Horribly familiar feeling. Great job in capturing that moment of panic.And I love that photo – such expression. Thanks for linking up and see for the weekday challenge, we hope.

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