Remember that new writing challenge I tried out last week at My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog? I forgot to mention it’s called 100 Word Song. Each week, a song is selected and entrants must offer 100 words (exactly) “interpreting” the song. Entries can be any form – poetry, limericks, signs, cartoons, essays, fictions, real life scenarios, etc.
This week, I got to pick the song. Seriously, it’s like getting to be the line leader in your kindergarten class. It’s a big deal around here. I went with Waiting on a Friend by the Rolling Stones. I’ve always liked it and it seemed like an interesting one to illustrate through words. Here goes (hopefully not) nothing …
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Waiting on a Friend
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“Where IS he?” she panicked, trying futilely to calculate the elapsed minutes since his last call. Her body was slowing down dramatically. Her plan was simple. Timing was crucial. She’d take the pills when he was an hour away. He’d arrive, find her and instantly recognize his mutual feelings.
She lay on the bed, trying to read the clock. 11:14. Or 11:41? The numbers blurred. The phone rang across the room. She heard his voice on the machine. Something about a fender bender. Running late.
Her lids closed and she drifted off, her languishing hand dropping the empty bottle to the floor.
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OldDogNewTits 
Thast line is magic. I loved it. The languishing hand, brilliant.
Great pick
I stole ‘languishing’ from Charlotte’s Web. (Sometimes I actually pay attention when my kids and I read together.)
Nice.I like how it starts off kind of frantic, then sort of mellows as she slips away, matching the melancholy wistfulness of the song.
Nice job!
And she fadesssss away…….
What a sad ending…
Well written and packed full of emotion. Great work!
Do I have to worry about you? LOLOL
You caught the bewilderment well. Poor, stupid creature, I want to shake her.
Exactly!! She doesn’t need him
Thanks for commenting.
The best laid plans of mice and men…
The blurring of the clock numbers was brilliant, btw. I’ve read this several times. I get something new every time.
That is a fabulous comment to give a writer. Thanks, Lance. I tried to fit a lot into 100 words. There were many edits.